my world
I live in a dark world
empty hollow
my dreams, tormenting thoughts
gloomy and weary
i am tired
every moment every second consuming me
devouring me bit by bit
lips apart, broken heart
confused mind - horror driven my hopes depart
air still
cold chills my bones
every second i face my fears
the fears i had been running from all these years
i walk in this land
full of thorns and stubs
bleeding instep arch, bleeding heart, crying soul
hails knock me down
i am bruised - head to toe
forget friends i do not have a foe...
i am living a life full of burden
without a goal
it's just me walking
and my wretched soul...
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07 10 2010.
pls comment...i am new
pls comment...i am new here...nobody knows i write poems...
if u ppl cud tell me abt it...i wud think of showing it to my friends...
07 10 2010.
This is a very well written
This is a very well written poem...i can feel ur pain through this poem...i can remember being in a dark place like this and i hope u find away to get out it and experience true happyness
07 10 2010.
thanks...your comment means a
thanks...your comment means a lot to me...
yours was the first comment in here...
i will always cherish it...
i read your poems...they are great!
07 11 2010.
thanks i am honored to
thanks i am honored to comment ur poem it was great :-)....and thanks for reading my poems
07 11 2010.
The only thing I gotta tell
The only thing I gotta tell you is : try to find rhymes , would be better.A very dark , but beautiful poem.I would've loved it if it was some rhymes :P btw keep working on your poems.
07 12 2010.
hey thnks....actually i m
hey thnks....actually i m more of free verse so rhymes r kinda u kno....dey dnt wrk ...for me...i mean its nt tht i dnt lyk it..its abt my way...bt yes i wud try to rhyme...as u say...
07 12 2010.
Excellent poem. I often feel
Excellent poem. I often feel the same way.. I love how your poem flows :)
07 15 2010.
hey...v-c-l thnks a lot!
hey...v-c-l thnks a lot!